look amongst the maidens there she is it will do her no good to resist?

Posted on November 23, 2009 by admin

Ive already declared her as mine amongst the gods I have prepared our castle high in the trees I shall greet her for the fist time in a ostrich driven chariot and whew her>>>>——> diary

Again, no line breaks…add them, it will improve the poem…same goes for punctuation…try not for a run-on rant because it’s difficult to know where to pause and where thoughts begin and end. Finally, it’s "an ostrich", not "a ostrich", and "woo", not "whew".

…keep writing

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One Response to look amongst the maidens there she is it will do her no good to resist?

  1. Kevin S says:
    November 23, 2009 at 1:53 pm

    Again, no line breaks…add them, it will improve the poem…same goes for punctuation…try not for a run-on rant because it’s difficult to know where to pause and where thoughts begin and end. Finally, it’s "an ostrich", not "a ostrich", and "woo", not "whew".

    …keep writing
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    Editor, New Poets Press