Comments on: look amongst the maidens there she is it will do her no good to resist? http://www.nkoyoyoguesthouse.com/maidens/look-amongst-the-maidens-there-she-is-it-will-do-her-no-good-to-resist/ Sat, 04 Feb 2012 10:29:59 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Kevin S http://www.nkoyoyoguesthouse.com/maidens/look-amongst-the-maidens-there-she-is-it-will-do-her-no-good-to-resist/#comment-2483 Kevin S Mon, 23 Nov 2009 18:53:59 +0000 http://www.nkoyoyoguesthouse.com/maidens/look-amongst-the-maidens-there-she-is-it-will-do-her-no-good-to-resist#comment-2483 Again, no line breaks...add them, it will improve the poem...same goes for punctuation...try not for a run-on rant because it's difficult to know where to pause and where thoughts begin and end. Finally, it's "an ostrich", not "a ostrich", and "woo", not "whew". ...keep writing<br><b>References : </b><br>Editor, New Poets Press Again, no line breaks…add them, it will improve the poem…same goes for punctuation…try not for a run-on rant because it’s difficult to know where to pause and where thoughts begin and end. Finally, it’s "an ostrich", not "a ostrich", and "woo", not "whew".

…keep writing
References :
Editor, New Poets Press

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